June 30, 2017
How to Write SaaS Onboarding Emails for Brand New Apps
Imagine you’ve just touched down in Paris. You’re standing at the top of the Eiffel tower, looking out at the Arc de Triomphe, thinking about all the delicious pastries and truffled sauces you’re going to eat. That’s when a fellow tourist turns to ask if you know of any good places to get some ice cream. You want to recommend _Berthillon because (after hours of googling) you’ve concluded that’s where you’ll get the best ice cream in Paris_. Of course, the City of Lights has no shortage of ice cream, so there are a ton of other places your new friend could also go. Either way, it doesn’t matter because you don’t yet know how to get anywhere in this town. You still want to help your new friend, so maybe you mumble some general advice: “There’s a great place on Ile St. Louis.” “You can stop at the Museé D’Orsay on the way there.” “They have lots of really unusual flavors.” But your new friend’s eyes glaze over as he nods, thanks you, and walks away to ask someone else for help. Why?
The danger of sending uninformed onboarding emails
In your friend’s world, “good place to get some ice cream” might actually mean “literally anywhere within 2 blocks that has chairs” and “has a chocolate and vanilla twist on the menu”. He and his 5 kids may have been walking for hours—so they don’t need a magical culinary experience as much as they need a kid-friendly treat and place to sit down. The long lines and fancy flavors at faraway Berthillon won’t solve this problem. Even if it did, he couldn’t get there based on your directions because they weren’t actually directions so much as they were a list of facts.
If you write your onboarding emails the same way that hypothetical you gave the wrong advice to a fellow tourist, then your new users will also conclude that you can’t help them get to where they want to go—and they’ll give up and go ask someone else’s app for help instead.
Unfortunately, too many apps behave just like hypothetical you and blast out feature-touting emails to new users before they know why new users are giving the app a try—which is the equivalent of giving directions by asking someone, “Did you know the Louvre is here, too?” What can you do to avoid this scenario? Use your early emails to learn about your new users and use everything you learn to _build an onboarding messaging strategy_ that will actually help people get to where they want to go in your app. I’m going to show you exactly how two apps do that with two close readings of two new user emails. We’re going to consider:
What makes these emails reply-button magnets
What you can learn from the responses these founders get
What you can do with the trove of qualitative data these emails generate
Airstory’s Approach: Gratitude as a Persuasion Technique
_Airstory_ is a new writing app from the team behind Copy Hackers. It’s built for writers, but not all writers have the same needs, pains, or goals. To eventually write messages that help content creators as much as they help copywriters, Airstory needs to know who’s signing up to give it a whirl and why… …which is exactly what this pre-launch email from co-founder Lance Jones does: Why it’s a reply-button magnet: _Research_ has shown that demonstrating gratitude in certain contexts can make people more likely to respond to your request. Lance expresses his gratitude in three places: “thank you”, “sincerely interested”, and “with appreciation”. It also demonstrates that he’s not some corporate robot somewhere—he’s a real person who’s genuinely grateful that you’ve given his product a shot. How it’s working for Airstory: I asked Lance how this email is performing. _“That email was embedded in the tool we were using to manage the pre-launch campaign. I’m afraid I no longer have access to the data… we stopped using it in February._ _“We send out a similar email when a new user signs up for Airstory, and we hear back from about 2% of users… there’s a link that we want them to click in the email, so getting them to reply isn’t a primary goal._ _“What we do (and did) notice about this question is that it typically gets very detailed answers. We learned what people are hoping to achieve, what kind of business/project they’re working on, and even other tools they use. The question is wide open intentionally… we read and respond to every reply.”_ Here’s a typical reply: What can do with this email? Open up lines of inquiry: You might be wary of believing your customers when they tell you what they want. “I would have built a faster horse” and all that. But this email actually offers the Airstory team a _ton_ of actionable data. We conversion copywriters like to call it “voice of customer data” because….it’s the real live voice of your customer. From this response, we know that this respondent:
Has started at least one business
Wants to change the way she does business
Has faced limitations with her other tools
Wants to be organized and effective with her copy
Is glad to be able to write things more easily according to how she thinks, rather than having to struggle with software
Each one of these facts is enough to launch us down a rabbit hole of inquiry that can help us grow our understanding of who’s using Airstory and what they need to hear to be successful with Airstory. Specifically, we can ask questions like:
How many Airstory users are entrepreneurs vs. solopreneurs vs. team members? Are groups using the app differently? Do they need different messaging?
This customer is writing copy and wants to get better at it—why? How is she using copy? Does copy enable her business? Or is copy what she sells? What’s the messaging difference for full time writers and solopreneurs who have to write?
It sounds like there’s something lurking underneath the surface here. If she’s starting a second business, what happened to the first? She wants to change her approach…does that mean she’s recently failed? Burnt out? Was that failure due to writing challenges?
She’s already starting to have more of an intuitive writing experience. What does that mean for her business?
We can ask her these questions in one-on-one interviews and note when these responses pop up in other scenarios. The more we know about exactly where this new users is in her life, the more we can make it easier for her to get where she wants to go…using Airstory. The key to making an email like this work for you: Lots of emails ask similar questions but with a much more ominous tone. Humans like connecting with other (cool, genuine, grateful) humans. Showing that you’re a real human can make your email one that people actually want to respond to.
Tiny Reminder’s Approach: Camaraderie + Quick Win = Swipeable Copy
Jane Portman of _UIBreakfast_ launched _Tiny Reminder_ earlier this year to help people automate the process of following up with clients—which is a huge and diverse demographic. She sends this email to new users: What makes it a reply-button magnet: This email subject line is squarely focused on the recipients (people who are busy), signals that they’re not alone (they’re part of a club now), and—this is important—it’s not about the product. “Welcome to the Tiny Reminder Club” would have been accurate but less focused on the reader. The second thing that works in this email’s favor is that Jane asks one straightforward question before her more nuanced question. This approach might motivate more people to respond to the second question because readers feel like they’ve already had a _small, quick win_ by answering the first question. (Of course, I can’t say for sure. It might make for an interesting test.) How it’s working for Tiny Reminder: I also asked Jane how this email was performing. _“About 10% of new users respond to this email (which feels like a lot). _ _“It gives great insight on each individual user which helps shape a larger picture. I carefully log all incoming messages and refer to them while writing sales copy. My last question (“How did you hear about us?”) also gives a good idea where the most responsive users come from. _ _“Responses vary dramatically in length, but both short and detailed responses are equally valuable to me. Also, they’re generally very friendly.”_ Here’s a typical reply: **What ****can *Tiny Reminder do with this email*? Build a list of messages to test: **This email is another gold mine of customer pain points and potential messages. From this email, we know that this respondent:
Has a freelance web design and development business
Struggles to manage bad clients
Has trouble getting clients to respond at the end of an engagement
Isn’t getting paid when she wants to because clients are unresponsive
Finds it difficult to remember to email her client again and again
Just like the Airstory response, this message gives us multiple threads of inquiry to tug at and copy to try. Based on this email, we might want to learn more about what exactly makes it so difficult to get responses from clients. We could test future trial messaging that shows freelancers how easy it is to use Tiny Reminder to address the biggest pain point—getting paid—with subject lines that look like this:
Remember to email your clients….without remembering to email your clients
Finally get the response you need to finish projects and get paid
Can your business flourish if you have unresponsive clients?
If our interviews and research also teach us that our Tiny Reminder users struggle to get responses from clients because it’s hard to write emails that actually result in responses, we can go one step further with our onboarding education:
How to make it wildly easy for your clients to respond to your emails
How to write an email that actually gets a response (according to data)
The magic reminder email that will get you paid today (with a template)
The key to making an email like this work for you: You can’t manufacture camaraderie, so don’t try to force a community around your product. Instead, focus on building community around your customers.
You’ll only be here once.
Right now, you have an an incredible unfair advantage over your larger competitors: you are at the starting line. Maybe you have 5 new signups a day. Maybe you have 10. Yes, you also have a thousand other things on your plate, but one day you’ll have 100 new signups a day…and even less time to get to know your new users. Everything you learn now you can use to _segment your users and write future messaging that actually helps your customers reach the a-ha moment_ where becoming a customer is, in Lincoln Murphy’s words, the _next most logical step_—and you can move more quickly than you will ever be able to move again. While everyone else is writing emails based on what they think know about how new users use their app, you can start slowly building a vast and nuanced understanding of your customers. _Special thanks to Lance Jones & Jane Portman for generously sharing their results. __Photo credits: Paul Munhoven and __David Monniaux._